Entity
Eunuch
There's a monkey with reading glasses!
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Post by Entity on Apr 7, 2003 7:18:50 GMT -5
Boy, this thread did get hijacked pretty badly.
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Post by johnny new on Apr 7, 2003 7:23:47 GMT -5
Boy, this thread did get hijacked pretty badly. NO, the more the merrier! everyone post prose/poetry! not enough feedback though, it's due in two days.... |
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Entity
Eunuch
There's a monkey with reading glasses!
Posts: 144
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Post by Entity on Apr 7, 2003 7:28:11 GMT -5
I'll have a hack at some of your stuff now.
Any piece in particular?
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Post by johnny new on Apr 7, 2003 7:35:18 GMT -5
I'll have a hack at some of your stuff now. Any piece in particular? yeah - one called 'a train' and if you have time/effort - just anything else - not pictures, theyre for fun and rushed... |
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Entity
Eunuch
There's a monkey with reading glasses!
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Post by Entity on Apr 7, 2003 7:56:11 GMT -5
You got mail, johnny.
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Post by johnny new on Apr 7, 2003 8:12:45 GMT -5
our carnival of insanity nevermind, nevermind. again. the night is all around us, the music all we've known. our carnival of insanity, round and round we go! as a child i wandered, open-mouthed and small in a reality so surreal it was a dream. nothing has changed. i am so overwhelmed, my thoughts so strong; darkness takes hold of my backdrop. menacing figures loom from inside shadows. darkness is infiltrated by little fiery lights swimming through my eyes, forcing me to sink back, crushing me in this carnival of insanity, it can turn the day to night, and any sounds to its twisted faraway inescapable and haunting melodies; subtle and almost non existent, yet so powerful. openmouthed and scattered I wander, every scene is the same, as if in some labyrinth, the wind drifts along, bringing with it the call of sickly children, so happy or afraid. we are two children here, and i can see your face which to me is a warm embrace the music cannot pierce the two of us. |
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Entity
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There's a monkey with reading glasses!
Posts: 144
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Post by Entity on Apr 7, 2003 8:16:49 GMT -5
I've commented on another few pieces, but i did that on Deviantart. You'll excuse me if they're a bit harsh.
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Post by johnny new on Apr 7, 2003 21:51:06 GMT -5
I've commented on another few pieces, but i did that on Deviantart. You'll excuse me if they're a bit harsh. a BIT harsh? christ. some of it was useful. check the train story on page one of the thread again - i changed around the stuff you recommended. you wree right about wasting words. have you read 'the politics of the english language' essay by orson wells? he's a smarty-pants man he is. |
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